Press Release Revision & Polish

I have a draft press release that is nearly there but still needs the sharp edge of a seasoned communicator. I’m looking for someone who can refine the language, tighten the structure, and make every sentence media-ready without losing the core message or my brand’s voice.

The current version is about 450 words. I need it checked for clarity, flow, AP-style consistency, and punchier headline and sub-headline options. If you spot any gaps—missing quotes, data points, or calls to action—flag them and suggest improvements. I’m aiming for a version that an editor could drop straight into print or an online wire with no further tweaks.

Please return:
• A clean, final press-ready document
• A tracked-changes file showing all edits
• A short rationale (2–3 lines) for any substantial rewrites

Two quick revision rounds after initial delivery will wrap this up.