Professional Product Video Revamp

My current product video does a decent job of showing the features, but it lacks the tight pacing and polished feel that turns viewers into buyers. I want you to take the raw footage and existing voice track, rethink the flow, and deliver a sharper, more engaging version.

Here’s what matters most to me:
• Editing & pacing are the top priority—smooth transitions, logical sequencing, and a runtime that holds attention right to the call-to-action.
• Animated graphics that reinforce key selling points, ideally built in After Effects or a similar tool, should replace the static lower-thirds I’m using now.
• A fresh voice-over read in a professional, formal tone. I can supply a draft script, but I’m open to tweaks if you think wording can drive more clarity or conversion.

Final deliverables I expect:
1. A master video file (1080p or higher) and a compressed web-ready version.
2. Source project files for both the edit (Premiere Pro, Final Cut, or DaVinci) and the motion graphics.
3. A separate WAV of the final VO, along with any revised script.

Please include a short note on how you’d restructure the opening thirty seconds, plus links to two or three product videos you’ve recently revamped that demonstrate crisp pacing paired with animated graphics.