Indonesian-English Story Substantive Edit

I have a non-fiction short story based on my personal experiences, written first in Indonesian and then rendered into English. I need a thorough substantive edit that sharpens structure and pacing, preserves my voice, and smooths cultural nuances so both versions read naturally and consistently.

I will provide a Word document containing the Indonesian text followed by the English translation. Your task is to reshape paragraphs where needed, tighten sentences, flag inconsistencies between the two languages, and suggest any re-ordering that strengthens the narrative arc. Please work in Track Changes and leave clear margin comments so I can understand the reasoning behind major adjustments.

Deliverables
• Edited Indonesian manuscript with Track Changes
• Edited English manuscript with Track Changes
• Final clean copies of both versions
• A brief editorial memo summarising key issues and recommendations

Fluency in Bahasa Indonesia and idiomatic English, plus proven experience editing narrative non-fiction, are essential. If you have samples of similar bilingual work, feel free to share them when you apply so I can see your approach.